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How to Raise a Reader: Tips to Help Your Children Love Books

December 4, 2021 by Michael Santos

A different topic today, but an important one. If you’re an avid reader, you may worry if your child or children seem uninterested in books. Of course, you want to ensure that they can read and write at a high level, because there are numerous advantages in life to having those skills, whether or not they become involved in a literary profession.

As a self-proclaimed book nerd going back to my school days, I thought I’d offer my advice to parents who face this conundrum.

Do schools ruin reading? How to raise a reader in the education system.

Education professionals debate this question, and there are many opinions about how to improve the methods of teaching literature so that students love reading.

Ask many adults who do not read, and they’ll tell you that school turned them off of books. Some often cited reasons:

  • Homework, tests and essays on books made reading drudgery and misery
  • Classic literary styles are less accessible and therefore less appreciated by young, busy students
  • Characters and situations of classic literature are from bygone eras and are not relatable to modern adult readers, let alone young students

Even I, who took every English and Drama class I could, found it challenging to be engaged with most of the assigned books. Sure, there were my favorites even back then (Frankenstein, The Great Gatsby, To Kill a Mockingbird, Lord of the Flies, Jekyll & Hyde, Scarlett Letter, etc.).

But it was difficult to view school reading as pleasurable even when I enjoyed and appreciated a specific work, because the homework and testing ruined the reading experience.

It was still preferable to math, however.

Rather, I came to love the reading I did every night before bed. That was the reading experience that came to define my understanding of what books could give me.

I read David Baldacci novels like a football fan eats buffalo wings during the Super Bowl. I read the James Bond novels, Le Carre, and anything in the spy, espionage, and political thriller genres I could, then got into crime fiction.

Independent reading on my own time, with books I chose and genres that came to be part of my identity, then gave me a greater appreciation for the books we read in class. Not the other way around.

So yes, schools ruin reading. But a student who discovers a love of books on their own will also likely find books they love at school.

Create a reading culture in your home: how to raise a reader outside the education system.

How then do we foster independent reading at home?

A key factor for me was that my parents were not prescriptive or demanding in their approach to my reading ability. For instance, there was never a time when they sat me in a chair, handed me a book, and said something like, “You must read for an hour before you can go outside and play.”

Had they taken such an angle, they would have reinforced all of the negative effects of the education system’s handling of books.

It would have been one more assignment standing between me and the things I wanted to do as a kid. Namely, playing…a creative act with value that should not be underestimated in a growing human being’s potential to eventually love stories.

Instead, they fostered a culture of reading by doing the following:

  • Filling the house with books. There was a bookshelf in practically every room. Books were therefore a part of life, and when one day I decided to give it a shot, I had my pick and it was the most natural choice in the world.
  • Reading in front of me. Kids have a special talent for sniffing out hypocrisy, such as when their parents make them drink milk at dinner every night when the parents never have milk, but instead choose more fun drinks like wine, soda, coffee, etc. Well, it works the same with reading.
    • My parents read a lot, and let me see them reading a lot. Thus, when they said positive things about books and reading, I believed them. And eventually followed their example.
    • Again, this created an opportunity for me to willingly and independently come to books, rather than forcing me to do so.
  • Emphasizing the importance of books at a macro level. My mother, especially, would always tell me, “Books are the backbone of civilization.” Of course, this holds true when you study the progression of societies and human history. Writing was fundamental to the advancement of the human race. That argument had a lot of mileage with me.

That culture of reading in the home led me to pick up a book one day, and I have never looked back.

How to raise a reader: it’s not as hard as you think.

So my message to parents is this: don’t stress. You don’t have to force your child to read or devise a complex regimen of activities to help them along. Instead, make books a part of their home life. Surround them with reading, and let them come to love books naturally.

Take it from a book nerd who took it to the extreme and became a writer.

Looking for a new thriller?

Check out my supernatural thriller, The Nowhere Game!

The Nowhere Game

Check out my Queen City Crime Series, available on Amazon in Kindle Ebook and print paperback.

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No Hard Feelings

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Mean Bones

Filed Under: On Writing Tagged With: how to raise a reader, how to write, parenting, reading, reading education, writing

How to Find Your Writing Style

August 25, 2019 by Michael Santos

How do you find your writing style? What is your author voice? These two questions are crucial for any writer to answer.

Style, to me, is like an author’s fingerprint. My favorite books tend to be written by my favorite stylists. When I buy a novel from one of those writers, I’m buying the way they (and only they) tell a story.

Give me a random passage and don’t tell me the author’s name – I’ll be able to identify if one of these writers penned it.

An author’s voice comes from elements like word choice, themes, and attitude.

I can’t stress that last point enough – you have to have an attitude.

Great Author Voices in Crime Fiction

Elmore Leonard – I’ve cited him as a major influence of mine both on this site and in books. Part of what drew me into his fiction was the iconic style and voice he brought to the page. It’s sleazy and grimy and goes down like good bourbon.

George Pelecanos – a contemporary author with a style that merges hard-boiled, clipped speech with literary poeticism.

Stephen King – a natural storyteller, King has a warm, familiar voice that pulls you in, builds empathy with the characters (good and horrific), and makes you want to keep reading.

There are many more, but I hope you see the idea. Each of these writers conveys emotion through the way they tell stories. They let you connect with their senses of humor, their attitudes, their outlooks on life.

Readers buy their books to hear more stories told in those voices.

Why your writing style is important for your career as an author.

The best scenario for a long-term career as an author is to allow readers to connect with you, the person behind the stories. Your style conveys who you are.

How you see the world. When a reader identifies you as a kindred spirit, through your style, they can become an engaged fan.

This is what happened when I first read the aforementioned authors. Beyond the entertainment, educational, and emotional value I found in their work, I knew they were my people.

I got to know them, which made me want to keep getting to know them. Now, I’m a diehard fan. Diehard enough to mention them over and over in articles like this.

The more people enjoy your writing style, the more they’ll read your books. The more they connect with you, the longer they’ll stay a reader.

Your writing style links your books to each other.

Genre authors will be used to writing series, in which a character or setting connects the stories. But voice can also accomplish that task, even for standalone books.

Here, we’ll return to Stephen King. Not all his titles are in a series (though he does connect them all in elaborate ways). But pick up any individual novel of his, and you’ll hear his author voice.

How do you find your writing style?

Read.

No, really. The best way to find your author voice is to read a lot. While you read, analyze the styles and storytelling techniques of the writers.

Do you like when they do x? Why? Do you hate when they do z? Why?

What creates the ideal reading experience for you?

I still haven’t read that long passage of description on page 2 of my copy of The Big Sleep. I skip it every time. But I really enjoy Dashiell Hammett’s sparse description, focusing on just the important bits and letting my imagination come up with the rest.

Then, try to write something. Emulate a writer whose style resonates with you. Learn their rhythms, their attitude. Likely, it is not so different from your own attitude.

You’ll find that your voice will develop from that exercise of reading, writing, and repeating. Let your own individuality come through the language. Make it yours.

Always, always begin with reading.

There’s no right and wrong in the arts. But there is right and wrong for you.

Subjectivity is everything in creative disciplines. Sure, there are best practices in the craft, standards of professionalism, all of that. But in terms of the “rules” of writing, every time someone prescribes one, a talented writer finds a way to successfully break it.

Don’t ask, “Is this right?” Ask, “Is this right for me?”

This is what I mean when I advise you to find the reading experience you prefer. Which writing techniques produce it? Who are the authors from whom you could learn those techniques? For that matter, who are some authors who do the opposite, and what effect do their approaches have on the reading experience?

That is your starting point. Your writing style and the way you enjoy telling stories can be found in that knowledge. Do your homework by reading and evaluating.

It’s the most fun you’ll ever have with homework. And I once had a physics assignment to drop buttered toast off the side of a table in the dining hall to see if it would land buttered side down. That was fun. Reading is more fun.

How I found my writing style.

I read those great stylists and studied my reactions to their work. Here is what I learned about the way I like to read:

  1. Dialogue over narration. I prefer authors who let the characters drive the story by acting and reacting to each other, the same way that stage play scenes are built from lines of speech.
  2. I like rotating third point of view, because it allows me to feel close to multiple characters, even supporting cast members. Often, I enjoy the supporting personalities the most.
  3. I like free indirect discourse, a method of close third narration that involves no separation between the character’s voice and the narrator’s voice. When you’re in the POV of one character, the narration is written in that person’s voice, not the authors. It sounds like dialogue. If you rotate POVs, then the next scene will be in a different character’s perspective and voice.
  4. All those previous points create more immersion for me, because the author is concealed behind the characters. As a reader, I’m left to be with the people in the story, experiencing their world in real time, with no middleman between us.
  5. A slightly irreverent, dry-humored wit never hurts with me.

That’s how I prefer to read stories, so I gravitated to authors who write that way. And, my own writing style accomplishes the same objectives.

I found my style by understanding how I like to read and then writing stories in kind.

You’ll also notice that my nonfiction voice (on display in these articles) is different from my approach to fiction. But that is a subject for another post.

This also isn’t to say you must write in the same style always and forever. People change, and our author voices change along with us. It’s best not to fight that.

But this is the best way I have found to get started.

Looking for a new thriller?

Check out my supernatural thriller, The Nowhere Game!

The Nowhere Game

 

Check out my Queen City Crime Series, available on Amazon in Kindle Ebook and print paperback.

No Hard Feelings

No Hard Feelings

Mr. Moneybags

Mean Bones

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How to Find an Idea for Your Novel or Story

August 14, 2019 by Michael Santos

How to find an idea for a book or a story is a question posed to virtually every author, both by interested readers and by aspiring writers.

In this post, I’ll tell you how I work, and pass on the advice that has helped me the most.

Write what you want to know.

Conventional wisdom is to write about what you know. You’ve probably seen this catchy phrase on other writing sites, or heard authors and teachers utter it. Many would have you search for story ideas in your experiences, in the knowledge that you currently possess.

In my opinion, that advice isn’t wrong . . . but it’s not right, either.

Starting out, when I deliberately tried to write about what I knew, I was too bored by my ideas to continue beyond a few chapters. Nothing held my attention, because I hadn’t let my curiosity lead the way.

Instead, ask yourself, “What if?”

Creative writing is not like journalism, historical writing, technical writing, or any other fact-based content. Even as I write this post, I approach the task from a different angle than I would a piece of fiction.

That’s because ideas in fiction do not come from asking, “What is?”

As fiction writers, we ask, “What if?”

We’re always asking that question, including in our daily lives. We take in information and find connections between seemingly unrelated things. Taking a couple of facts and turning them upside-down or spinning them in a new way is a source of amusement to the creative writer.

More than that, it’s fulfilling, satisfying.

How to get an idea from “What if?”

What are you curious or passionate about? Which subject interests you enough to research it and then explore its possibilities through the experiences of fictional characters?

What if a priest and a rabbi really did walk into a bar, and it wasn’t a joke? What if the sky did fall?

What if someone pays a hitman a substantial amount of money to commit a different kind of crime? And what if, outside of his comfort zone, he makes a mistake and angers his vengeful client? This became my first novel, No Hard Feelings.

What if two armed-robbers plan to steal from a powerful crime boss, and go so far as to kidnap him? What if, instead of coming to his rescue, the crime boss’s underlings decide they want the money for themselves? There you have my second novel, Mr. Moneybags.

What if a teenage boy, seemingly destined for a career as a stock car driver, gave up his dream of racing to become a U.S. Marshal, after his father was murdered? What if, as a marshal, he now learns the identity of the killers and has the means (and the bullets) to chase them down? Those questions became my third novel, Mean Bones.

I always begin with a character and a situation. The situation has to be something I’m interested in, not something I already know. I must be motivated to spend 300-plus pages exploring an idea.

It is the What If’s in life that nourish a writer. So, dig into those questions and be nourished.

Let the characters do the work.

Once you have a situation, create and flesh out characters. When I say “flesh out” I mean really get to know them. Their hopes and their dreams. Their fears, habits, priorities, goals, weaknesses, strengths, routines, etc. When the story opens, what is their status quo?

A story is worth telling if a character’s life is irrevocably changed by what happens. The events and relationships that your characters experience in the novel should push them to their emotional and/or physical limits.

If they make it out alive (I write crime fiction, remember), they will never be the same, either for better or for worse.

Often, you’ll find that the best protagonist is one who personifies the major themes of the story. Keep that in mind as you develop them.

When the characters are well-sketched, drop them into their starting positions and turn them loose. If you know who they are, they’ll direct the story through their interactions. Of course, writers who prefer to outline will start with more concrete plans, where as “pantsers” (myself included) like to sit back and watch the story unfold.

You will always write about what you know.

So, what about that popular phrase I mentioned at the beginning? After all, it’s popular for a reason.

I believe that, because our characters come from us, it is impossible not to write about what we know. Our experiences, thoughts, questions, understanding, empathy, etc. will always come through in the people we create. We don’t have to force it.

I try to never manage my characters. I set them in motion, often in pursuit of the same, mutually exclusive goal, and record what they do. If I know Characters A and B, then I’ll be able to write Character A’s reaction when Character B does or says something dramatic. My stories build one reaction at a time.

The key to getting this far, though, is to write from a standpoint of curiosity. Never stop asking, “What if?”

I think writers are more interested in asking questions than providing answers. Questions are dramatic, answers are not. Questions are dangerous conflicts, answers are safe resolutions. The question is fire, the answer a bucket of cold water that extinguishes the excitement.

The question, not the answer, is the story.

Read in order to write.

It’s also important to maintain your creative health. I have never heard of, read, or met a successful author who was not also a prolific reader. Often, they even have other creative hobbies, outside of the world of books.

It’s crucial for us to recharge our artistic batteries with the work of others.

I enjoy drinking coffee and reading on weekend mornings (or at night before bed, or when I’m waiting somewhere, or at any other waking moment). I also play the bass guitar in a band and write song lyrics. When I need inspiration for my fiction writing, or simply a break and a step back, I grab a book or my bass.

Writers are not assembly lines.

In today’s world of rapid release publishing, that is sometimes difficult to see. Self-care is as important for our creative lives as it is for any other aspect of our existence.

Take a break and recharge. You might be surprised by the ideas that will come.

Use real places for idea inspiration.

Ever visit a city, town, or famous building and think about using it as a story setting?

That is another form of “What if?” question. What if a character encountered an interesting situation at this location?

When I was developing the idea for Mean Bones, I was inspired by the North Carolina mountains and the town of North Wilkesboro. For all my Queen City crime novels, I spend time in Charlotte, where the books are set, and come back to the page, ready to work on the next story.

What are some places of interest to you? The idea you’ve been looking for might be there.

Look at society for an idea.

I would never advocate turning a work of fiction into a preachy manifesto. Your novel shouldn’t be a political brochure or a soap box disguised as a book.

That said, often a story can be derived from an issue or aspect of society that you feel needs to be discussed.

The trick is to make sure the characters represent and personify the social commentary you want to include. Don’t write a treatise. Write a story that proves your point through the events and people involved.

“My idea has to be original!” and other dumb things we tell ourselves.

I’ve seen many aspiring writers become paralyzed by the fact that their idea is not 100 percent original. They feel it’s been done before. They’re convinced they won’t be a real artist unless they redefine what it is to tell a story.

Rookie authors worry about originality. Veteran writers have, somewhere along the way, learned the truth: there is no such thing as an original idea.

Every idea has been done before. You can boil any story you’ve ever encountered down to one of a handful of plot types.

What will be original is your specific execution of an idea. Nobody else on this planet is you, so nobody else can approach a story the same way that you would.

Don’t let the myth of originality stop you from charging ahead. Start your story. Create your characters. Allow your experiences and perspectives to come through in the writing and make an old idea new.

For some reason, this seems to be a trade secret. They ought to teach this in more writing classes.

We are not bigger than the story, the story is bigger than us. Don’t lose sight of that by thinking that you’re an artist. You very well might be one, but the moment you call yourself that, you may as well hang up your pen.

Looking for a new thriller?

Check out my supernatural thriller, The Nowhere Game!

The Nowhere Game

 

Check out my Queen City Crime Series, available on Amazon in Kindle Ebook and print paperback.

No Hard Feelings

No Hard Feelings

Mr. Moneybags

Mean Bones

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Filed Under: On Writing Tagged With: creative writing, crime fiction, how to write a book, how to write a story, novels, stories, writing, writing tips

The FBI, ATF, DEA, and US Marshals: Federal Agencies for Writers

January 21, 2019 by Michael Santos

One of the key challenges of writing crime fiction is getting your facts straight. While every story requires artistic liberties, such as cutting the duller moments of a cop’s job (i.e. the paperwork), readers in this genre expect that authors understand the most important details of crime and law enforcement.

Many amateur authors make the mistake of using the wrong agencies in their stories. For instance, having the FBI investigate a local murder, which would actually be the jurisdiction of local authorities. Or having ATF chase a fugitive with a drug charge. The U.S. Marshals apprehend wanted fugitives, and the DEA is the federal agency created to fight the war on drugs.

In this article, I’ll give you a rundown of the most commonly referenced federal law enforcement agencies so you can get it right.

Federal Bureau of Investigation (FBI)

The FBI is a popular choice for crime writers, especially in the serial killer thriller sub-genre. If you’re writing about the Bureau, here’s what you need to know:

  1. It is the principal federal law enforcement agency of the United States. The Bureau operates under the jurisdiction of the US Department of Justice and reports to the US Attorney General and the Director of National Intelligence.
  2. It does NOT work local cases, which fall to state, municipal, and county departments.
  3. Its wide variety of duties encompass national security and criminal investigation responsibilities that include: anti-terrorism operations, defending the US from foreign intelligence, stopping cyber attacks and crimes, combating corruption, defending civil rights, fighting national and transnational criminal organizations (such as the infamous LCN), combating white-collar crime, and supporting law enforcement partners (such as on task forces).
  4. It has 56 field offices in major US cities, as well as 60 Legal Attaches (called LEGATs) at US embassies in foreign countries. Those offices primarily coordinate with international law enforcement, rather than conduct operations in other nations.

The Organization

The FBI has a myriad of branches. Click each of these links for more information.

  • Intelligence Branch
  • National Security Branch
  • Criminal, Cyber, Response, and Services Branch
  • Science and Technology Branch
  • Information and Technology Branch
  • Human Resources Branch

Rank Structure

Field Agents

  • New Agent Trainee
  • Special Agent
  • Senior Special Agent
  • Supervisory Special Agent
  • Assistant Special Agent-in-Charge (ASAC)
  • Special Agent-in-Charge (SAC)

FBI Management

  • Deputy Assistant Director
  • Assistant Director
  • Associate Executive Assistant Director
  • Executive Assistant Director
  • Associate Deputy Director
  • Deputy Chief of Staff
  • Chief of Staff and Special Counsel to the Director
  • Deputy Director
  • Director

Duty Weapons

FBI Special Agents are issued the Glock 22 or 23 semi-automatic handgun, chambered in the .40 S&W cartridge. The next generation of FBI weapons, also produced by Glock, will shoot the 9mm Parabellum, and will be branded the Glock 17M and 19M.

Bureau of Alcohol, Tobacco, Firearms and

Explosives (ATF)

ATF is an interesting law enforcement agency because the crimes it investigates are so specialized and specific. They feature prominently in my favorite crime novel, The Friends of Eddie Coyle, by George Higgins. Here’s what you need to know:

  1. Like the FBI, it operates under the jurisdiction of the Department of Justice.
  2. It investigates and prevents crimes related to: unlawful use, possession, and manufacture of firearms; acts of arson and bombings; the trafficking of alcohol and tobacco products and the tax evasion that accompanies such activity. ATF also regulates interstate commerce and transportation of firearms and explosives.
  3. Much of its operations involve working with local and state law enforcement on task forces, such as the Charlotte Fire Investigation Task Force featured in my first novel, No Hard Feelings.
  4. It is not unusual for ATF to be included in narcotics investigations, since guns and drugs are almost always found together.

Agents and Structure

ATF Special Agents are empowered to conduct investigations and work with local and state police to reduce violent crime across the United States. They have the lead in any federal investigation involving firearms, explosives, or tobacco-related crimes such as cigarette smuggling.

They can also conduct narcotics investigations independently of other agencies like the DEA. Once again, this is a practical empowerment given the fact that criminals and criminal organizations use firearms to defend drugs and the money illegal substances bring.

ATF Industry Operations Investigators (IOIs) conduct routine investigations into the industries regulated by the agency (such as firearms and explosive dealers, manufacturers, and wholesalers).

Field Offices

ATF has field offices in: Atlanta; Baltimore; Boston; Charlotte, North Carolina; Chicago; Columbus, Ohio; Dallas; Denver; Detroit; Houston; Kansas City, Missouri; Los Angeles; Louisville, Kentucky; Miami; Nashville, Tennessee; New Orleans; New York City; Newark, New Jersey; Philadelphia; Phoenix, Arizona; San Francisco; Seattle; St. Paul, Minnesota; Tampa, Florida; and Washington, D.C.

Duty Weapons

Special agents are equipped with the Glock 22 or Glock 27 handgun as their primary weapon. ATF Special Response Teams (SRTs) also carry Colt M4 assault rifles, among other firearms.

Drug Enforcement Administration (DEA)

The DEA was established in 1973 to fight the global war on drugs. The United States is one of the world’s largest markets for illegal substances. The DEA has 223 offices in the country, as well as 86 offices in other countries.

  1. The DEA is the lead agency for domestic enforcement of the Controlled Substances Act, sharing its jurisdiction and duties with the FBI, ICE, and Homeland Security.
  2. They often work with local and state law enforcement in DEA-led drug task forces.
  3. In 2005, the DEA seized a reported $1.4 billion in drug trade related assets and $477 million worth of drugs.
  4. The DEA also employs an Aviation Division and Special Response Teams (SRTs). SRT missions often involve high-risk arrests, surveillance, arrests of high-profile individuals, witness protection,  breaching, tactical training for local and state police units and teams, and fugitive searches.

Duty Weapons

DEA Special Agents’ primary service weapons include the Glock 17 and Glock 19, the Remington 870 12-gauge shotgun, and Rock River Arms LAR-15 semi-auto carbine.

The United States Marshals Service

I’ve saved my personal favorite federal agency for last. The US Marshals Service is the oldest federal law enforcement agency, dating back to 1789. Marshals are famous for their acts of heroism in the wild west, as they pursued wanted men with posses of deputies.

Today, they serve the 94 federal court districts with approximately 4,000 deputy marshals.

  1. The marshals do not investigate crimes. Their duties include: judicial security and protection, fugitive asset forfeiture, transporting prisoners, operating the WITSEC program, and (as they always have) chasing fugitives and individuals wanted on indictment or by warrant.
  2. They are the most effective federal agency in terms of arrests, with around 350 daily collars.
  3. They often work with local and state law enforcement to apprehend fugitives. Marshals can deputize local LEOs, giving them jurisdiction beyond that of the LEO’s parent agency. For instance, a deputy marshal working with a city police department can deputize an officer. This allows that officer to operate and make an arrest outside the jurisdiction of the city.

Duty Weapons

Deputy marshals carry .40 S&W caliber Glocks, including the Glock 22, 23, and 27. They also carry a backup weapon of their choosing, provided it meets agency standards. Due to the high potential for violent opposition when arresting fugitives, marshals are also equipped with body armor and can wield ballistic shields, helmets, and goggles for the highest risk operations.

Summary

It is every crime author’s responsibility to stay as true to real life law enforcement as the story allows. Readers want it, expect it, and demand it. Fortunately for writers, the subjects of crime and law enforcement are fascinating.

Do your research and choose the right agencies!

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Looking for a new thriller?

Check out my supernatural thriller, The Nowhere Game!

The Nowhere Game

 

Check out my Queen City Crime Series, available on Amazon in Kindle Ebook and print paperback.

No Hard Feelings

No Hard Feelings

Mr. Moneybags

Mean Bones

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Filed Under: On Writing Tagged With: crime fiction, how to write crime fiction, law enforcement

My Ten Rules for Dialogue Writing

January 7, 2019 by Michael Santos

In this article, I’m giving you my rules for great dialogue writing, one of the most important skills for any author to master.

In my genre of crime fiction, dialogue is essential for effective storytelling, so this is the topic that I have spent the most time studying. Readers compliment me on the dialogue in my novels. I work hard to make sure it’s always snappy, authentic, and entertaining.

Here are the rules of dialogue writing that I live by…

1. Dialogue must advance story, characterization, and dynamics.

Dialogue should move the plot forward. That is, the reader should be closer to the story’s conclusion at the end of an exchange between characters than they were at the beginning.

This ties into my earlier post about Story Writing: The Ultimate Guide to Great Scenes, when we talked about the need for scenes to turn. There must be some change over the course of the scene, or the section isn’t relevant enough to the story for the reader to care.

Dialogue is the same way. There must be some change over the course of the exchange.

Conversations between characters should also tell us about who they are. What a person says (and what they don’t say) can be a powerful indicator of their motivations and feelings. Dialogue can deliver important information about their backgrounds, their present perspectives, and what they hope the future will be.

Finally, you want your dialogue to reveal more about the dynamics between characters. Use what the characters say to each other (and, again, what they don’t say) to show how the various relationships in the story progress and evolve.

If a passage of dialogue does not accomplish ALL three of these objectives, it needs to be reworked so that it does. This is how great dialogue writers use their characters’ spoken words to tell a compelling story.

2. Dialogue should never be mundane.

Never include introductions in your dialogue.

“Hi, how are you?” “I’m good, thanks. You?” “Great.”

See how boring that is? When you write a passage of dialogue, jump right into the relevant situation at hand. Get to the part that advances the story, characterization, and dynamics without any of the fluff that people go through in real life.

Mundane verbiage, such as introductions (or worse, discussion of the weather), doesn’t make your dialogue sound more “real.” It just makes it a chore to read.

3. Give each character distinct rhythms of speech.

Nobody speaks exactly like anybody else. In fiction, it’s especially important to make your characters sound unique from one another.

To do otherwise is a classic mistake made by most beginning authors.

Pay attention to sentence structure, turns of phrase, and words that can be omitted to give each character a distinct voice.

Culture and regional background can be helpful here. I don’t enjoy reading dialogue that contains too much dialect, such as when the page is cluttered with apostrophes. That becomes annoying very quickly. However, changing the rhythms of speech based on dialect is a much less intrusive way of introducing a character’s background into their dialogue.

Every reader has a “mind’s ear” as well as a mind’s eye. It’s crucial that your characters each sound unique for the reader to connect with them as individuals.

4. Keep those rhythms of speech consistent.

Once you have your characters’ speech patterns figured out, keep them the same throughout the story. The sound of a person’s dialogue will be a major identifier and a source of connection for the reader. It’s important not to change that as you write each subsequent passage of dialogue.

5. Be a little over the top, but not too much.

The best dialogue writers (Elmore Leonard, George Higgins, George Pelecanos) all practice(d) this secret.

Authentic dialogue should feel slightly over the top as you write it. The character’s personality and speech patterns should, to you, come across as MORE than what you’d hear in real life.

The reason is that, while we strive for authenticity, fiction will never be real life. Dialogue must pop off the page for it to resonate the way spoken words do in our daily conversations.

This is another reason to keep your dialogue from being mundane—not only in subject matter, but also in tone and voice.

Push your characters’ rhythms of speech and sounds. If it feels slightly over the top to you, it will feel just right to the reader. Otherwise, you risk writing flat, boring dialogue that doesn’t ring true or deliver a special experience.

A word of caution, however. If you make it too over the top, you’re in danger of penning a caricature at best and something offensive at worst. Don’t stereotype your characters with this rule.

Find the sweet spot that will make your dialogue crackle.

6. Use “said” in your dialogue tags.

A dialogue tag is the “he said” or “she said” that accompanies a line spoken by a character.

This rule is a hotly debated topic in the writing world. Some authors prize variety in their dialogue tags, opting for phrasings like, “he chortled,” “he murmured,” “he shouted.”

Others are of the opinion that you should only use the verb “said.”

I take a stand on this issue and strongly side with the “said” camp. Here’s why.

Dialogue tags are there to give the reader a split second of clarity as to who is speaking. By only using “said,” you allow the reader to become accustomed to seeing it. Therefore, they’ll eventually just skip over the tags and continue with the characters’ conversation. The tag is there if they need clarity, but it is so nondescript that it never interrupts the exchange.

More “creative” tags, on the other hand, intrude on the conversation. The author’s voice interjects to tell you how a line is spoken.

Any good line of dialogue will contain enough context and will be written well enough to show you how a line is spoken. You don’t need the writer to spell it out for you.

So, don’t intrude on your characters’ conversations. Demonstrate your knowledge of various verbs in your prose, not in your tags.

7. Grammar is a suggestion.

The rules of grammar should be viewed as fluid when writing dialogue.

The reason?

People do not speak properly. See? I just ended a sentence with an adverb. And that’s nothing compared to what your characters could do with (or to) the English language.

Ask yourself, How would each individual in my book treat the rules of grammar?

This is one of the most potent techniques for affecting your characters’ rhythms of speech and adding authenticity to your dialogue. Again, factor in each character’s background.

In my own writing and in the research for each novel, I often find major differences between how various criminal subcultures and organizations treat grammar. The same also goes for the different levels and locales of law enforcement communities.

The caveat is this. You have to format dialogue properly, which includes an understanding of how quotation marks and punctuation work.

Dialogue is musical, so let’s compare it to musical notation. You can play around with rhythm, pitch, and tempo in music, but in order for the person reading the sheet to understand what to hear, you have to notate the page properly.

For writers, punctuation is our notation. It tells the reader how to hear our dialogue. For instance: commas introduce short pauses, periods introduce full stops. Em-dashes allow us to interject a related thought into a larger one. Double and single quotation marks orient us in a character’s speech.

To write rhythmically and musically, you must know how punctuating dialogue works.

8. Characters should never directly express their feelings.

“John, I’m sad.”

That is a terrible line of dialogue. Yes, your characters can express how they feel through what they say, but it should never be so on the nose and obvious.

Dialogue should indirectly show the reader how a character feels. Combine that with descriptive body language and well-written narration, instead of delivering emotions through declarative statements.

9. Don’t write long speeches.

It’s fine to include a longer passage of dialogue in certain contexts, such as when one character tells a story to another. But, in general, don’t give anybody a soliloquy. If you do have a legitimate reason for a character to engage in an extended dialogue, make sure you put space between that passage and the next.

Use lengthy dialogue in moderation or not at all.

People don’t like to listen for very long, and chances are, the character they’re speaking to will want to interrupt and say something.

There’s a trick in the craft of acting…an actor will start delivering a line just as a scene partner finishes their line. You jump on each other’s dialogue to keep the scene energized and moving forward. That’s often how we interact with each other in daily life too.

So, don’t let one character dominate a conversation for pages on end. Somebody will want to put in their two cents. Let them.

10. Read your dialogue aloud.

This is the most important rule of dialogue writing. I’d actually recommend reading your entire story out loud, both the dialogue and the narration. But it is especially important with dialogue.

Ask yourself, Does each character sound unique?

Does my dialogue sound like my voice? If so, change it. No character’s spoken words should sound like the written word.

Am I playing with sentence structure enough? Am I incorporating dialect and background in an effective way? Does any passage go on for too long?

Are my rhythm and musicality pleasing to the ear?

Does my dialogue crackle with enough exaggeration to feel authentic when I hear it aloud?

Only by hearing your dialogue will you be able to perfect it.

Summary.

To review, my ten rules for dialogue writing are:

  1. Dialogue must advance story, character, and dynamics.
  2. Dialogue should never be mundane.
  3. Each character should have distinct rhythms of speech.
  4. You must keep those rhythms of speech consistent.
  5. Dialogue should feel a little over the top to the writer, so it can feel authentic to the reader.
  6. “Said” is the best verb in dialogue tags.
  7. Defy the rules of grammar but get your punctuation right.
  8. Characters should never directly express their feelings.
  9. Long speeches should be used sparingly.
  10. Read your dialogue aloud.

For a masterclass in dialogue writing, check out George Higgins’s masterpiece, The Friends of Eddie Coyle. It gets my vote for the best crime novel ever written, and the book is approximately 80% dialogue. You’ll see a little bit of every technique in there.

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How to Write in Free Indirect Style

January 4, 2019 by Michael Santos

Free indirect style is my favorite form of third person point of view. It is a narrative style that combines the benefits of first and third person. Here’s why I prefer to use it in my novels…

But first, if you want more information on Point of View in Stories, don’t miss my full article on the subject.

The advantage of the novel.

Free indirect styleStorytelling can be accomplished through a wide variety of media, and technological advances make that more true with every passing year.

As digital media like television, movies, and streaming services captivate audiences today, you might wonder how and why the novel has survived. The reason is that every medium has its advantages over the others.

The novel uniquely allows writers to explore the internal conflicts of characters.

A television show or movie can’t deliver the thoughts of a character without voice over or clever graphics. Visual media has other advantages over the written word, but books are the best for bringing us close to the deepest levels of a fictional person.

That is why they remain such popular and powerful methods of storytelling.

First person point of view and internal conflict.

First person has many benefits (which I detail in my article on Point of View in Stories). Chief among them is the ability to maximize the advantage of the novel—that is, the closeness between the reader and the characters’ inner lives.

This point of view gives us a narrator who is a character intimately involved in the events of the story. We see those events, the other characters, and the fictional world through the perspective of that character.

And we become keenly familiar with their internal conflicts over the course of the book.

First person is therefore an ideal choice for its immediacy and its narrow field of focus on the psyche and emotional journey of the protagonist, which is the main advantage of the novel as a storytelling medium.

But it also has its limitations.

There are stories that call for more perspectives than that of just one character. First person restricts us to one narrator, because adding multiple first person narrators is clunky and confusing for the reader.

This begs the question, Is there a narrative style that can deliver the closeness of first person with the flexibility to switch viewpoint characters?

Free indirect style explained.

Third person is the most popular POV in fiction today. It allows the author to have more flexibility and to switch between viewpoints, usually with simple scene and chapter breaks.

However, third person’s limitation is that it creates more narrative distance between the reader and the characters.

Luckily, free indirect style was created to solve this problem. It is a combination of first and third person, with both the intimacy and immediacy of first, and also the flexibility of third.

There are two narrative entities in free indirect style: the third person narrator (the writer) and the character (or multiple characters, if you rotate between them with scene breaks).

The characters “speak” their thoughts directly to the reader in the narration. Instead of the author’s voice on the page, the reader hears the characters’ voices.

Functionally, free indirect style works exactly the same way that first person does. The reader enjoys direct contact with the characters, which creates that same deep interaction with the internal conflicts of the people in the story. However, the writer is still using third person, so they can switch between viewpoints at will.

Elmore Leonard, my favorite author, was the master of this technique. Read his classic crime novel, Get Shorty, for a clinic on how to use free indirect style.

How I use free indirect style.

Or check out my novels. Free indirect style forms the basis and foundation of my narrative prose. I love writing in my characters’ voices.

They are lowlife scumbags, who come up with ill-fated schemes to make illicit fortunes. Then there are the law enforcement professionals tasked with catching those crooks. My own narrative voice is NOT more interesting than theirs. How could it be?

So, I set every scene in the perspective of a character. The narration in that scene comes directly from that person, in their voice. The reader doesn’t hear me at all.

As a reader, I find free indirect style to be the most immersive POV, because it lets me forget that an author is involved in the book. I feel like I’m with the characters, without a writer in between us. They give me their thoughts in real time, as we encounter the story together.

An example.

Here’s a passage from my second novel, Mr. Moneybags. It is set in the viewpoint of a character named Reggie, a twenty-four-year-old car thief. Note that the narration is in his voice. It utilizes his rhythms of speech, his ideas of correct grammar, and his turns of phrase…not mine.

Reggie half listened to Tommy on the way to the airport in the dead of night. Half listened as they rolled their beat-up ’99 Chevy Lumina through rows of parked cars in the lot farthest from the terminals and with the least amount of security, Tommy saying this place wasn’t bad for finding cars. If you were careful. Like the time Butch’d had him steal a Mercedes S-Class, the big silver one on the showroom floor, by the windows. Reggie thought that was all well and good, but the lot didn’t have an M6 tonight, and then he saw the yellow LEDs of an airport cop pulling in for his shift. Meant they couldn’t linger without drawing suspicion. So, what good had Tommy’s story done them?


They checked the South Park area next. Reggie half listened some more, as Tommy told him the SouthPark Mall was a decent spot during the day, but not now. Reggie wanted to ask, Then why were they there, if it was pointless at night? But didn’t, preferring to get himself ready, man, get hyped up for doing the job and proving himself, not just hearing Tommy go on and on about how great he was.

We get Reggie directly telling us his thoughts about the job, the present situation, and his rival on the auto-theft crew, Tommy. I’m not narrating this section…Reggie is.

That is the power of free indirect style.

Summary.

Let’s review:

  1. The novel is the best storytelling medium for examining the internal life of a character.
  2. First person point of view brings us closest to a character’s internal state, but limits us to one narrator.
  3. Third person point of view gives us the flexibility to switch narrators, but distances the reader from the characters.
  4. Free indirect style combines the advantages of first and third person, while also eliminating the disadvantages. The reader is close to the characters, but the author can switch viewpoints with a scene or chapter break.
  5. Narration in free indirect style uses the viewpoint character’s voice, not the author’s.

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Story Writing: Verb Tenses

January 2, 2019 by Michael Santos

In this article, we explore verb tenses in fiction writing.

A verb is what somebody or something does. The tense of a verb tells us when the action is taken. The person of a verb lets us know who is taking the action.

Which verb tense is right for your story? Read on to find out.

Verb tense (when the action happens).

You’ll have to choose between past tense and present tense. Both come with their advantages. Additionally, certain genres will have preferences toward one or the other. Of course, that doesn’t mean you have to follow those preferences, but you may wish to if you are a fan of the genre in which you’re writing.

Present tense.

Let’s start with present tense, because it is currently (as of this writing) trending in the crime genre, especially in murder mysteries featuring a detective or detective inspector protagonist.

Authors who prefer present tense often say that it creates high immediacy. Present tense makes it feel like the story is happening “right now.” The effect is magnified when you combine present tense with first person narration, which also heightens immediacy.

I take a shortcut down a dark alley, feel a gun against my spine. A voice says, “Give me your wallet.”

This can be ideal for any type of fiction, but it especially explains the appeal of this tense with today’s genre writers, who write novels that prioritize the external narrative and effects like suspense. For an excellent novel in first person present tense, read the classic legal thriller Presumed Innocent, by Scott Turow.

A personal note to snobs.

I have heard some authors (those who would debate the terms artist and storyteller) suggest that present tense is popular with commercial fiction writers today because it is simple. It keeps the timeline of events in a story streamlined and easy to manage. The implication is that commercial writers can’t handle more complicated narratives, so they deliberately “limit” themselves.

As a commercial author, I’m tempted to respond to that opinion using language favored by my criminal characters and their lowlife vocabularies.

But I won’t. I’ll just say that the assertion that present tense is for “simple” fiction and “simple” writers is ironic. Despite the current trends, in my market research I have discovered that a large number of crime readers find present tense inherently pretentious.

To be honest, I’ve always felt that way, myself. When I read present tense, it sounds too “writerly,” which reminds me that I’m reading and breaks my immersion.

Other commercial readers love present tense, however, and it falls to every writer to determine which tense is better for their project. Many acclaimed genre authors, such as Michael Connelly, have been known to use both of these verb tenses in the same novel. Perhaps the protagonist’s passages are in first person present tense, but the antagonist’s are in third person past. His novel The Poet makes use of that combination very well.

It’s your choice.

Don’t let snobs affect your decision.

Past tense.

While it’s true that present tense is enjoying a spike in appeal among today’s authors, past tense remains the more popular of the two.

Stories have traditionally been written in the past tense, going all the way back to the classics. As a result, it is the more natural tense for storytelling with the written word. For many readers, our mental ears have a kind of trained familiarity with past tense narration.

He took a shortcut down a dark alley, felt a gun against his spine. A voice said, “Give me your wallet.”

As a result, it actually has much the same immediacy as present tense. Despite the verb tense telling us that the events are past, we still feel them in the narrative present. This is especially true when you combine past tense with limited third person narration, which closes the distance to the characters and delivers even more immediacy.

Past tense also allows flexibility for the author to seamlessly play with the timeline. It’s easier to include flashback sections in a past tense narrative. In fact, for a novel that utilizes present tense in the main narrative, it is often optimal to switch to past for any sections that jump around in time.

My opinion, for what it’s worth.

Combine the natural, familiar feel of past tense with its ability to reach the same levels of immediacy as present tense and the additional flexibility it gives your narrative timeline.

That’s why I prefer past tense, not only as a writer, but as a reader too.

However, that’s only my opinion. Once again, choose the tense that will create the effect you desire.

Verb person.

For an extensive look into the options available for verb person, read my article, “Point of View in Stories”.

Summary.

To review:

  1. Choose between present and past tense.
  2. Present tense is trending right now, due to its immediacy and its focused approach to the narrative timeline.
  3. Past tense remains the more popular of the two, because of its familiar quality, a similar (if not the same) level of immediacy when combined with the most popular verb person (limited third), and the flexibility it lends to your story’s timeline.

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Point of View in Stories

December 30, 2018 by Michael Santos

In this article we’ll discuss the different point of view (POV) options available to writers, how to execute them, and the benefits/drawbacks of each.

What is point of view?

Point of view is the technical term for the vantage point the writer uses to tell the story.

The reader experiences scenes through the perspective of that person, who is either the author or the viewpoint character. This means that you, the writer, can use your own narrative voice or you can tell the story through your characters.

Choosing the right POV for your project is one of the most crucial decisions that will make or break a work. The choice will ultimately depend on the effect you want to create for the reader.

Common types of point of view.

In this section, I’ll give you brief descriptions of the major types of point of view, and we’ll explore some of them in greater detail later on.

First person.

Dark AlleyIn this point of view, the story is told by the narrator, a character who is deeply involved in the story and relays their perspective with “I”.

I took a shortcut down a dark alley, felt a gun against my spine. A voice said to me, “Take out your wallet.”

One crucial element to remember is that first person point of view is limited to the knowledge, experience, and perception of the narrator. We can only tell the reader information that the character already has. The thoughts of other characters are off-limits.

We can, however, tell the reader what the narrator believes other characters are thinking. But we must stay in the mind and voice of our narrator, alone.

This is perhaps the most natural and intuitive POV to use, and will often be the best choice for beginning writers. Why? When we tell stories in day to day life, we almost always use first person, going all the way back to when we were children.

“How was your day, honey?”

“Great. I got an A in Spanish.”

Keep in mind that first person narration is not in the author’s voice. There is a character narrating the story, so it must be the character’s voice on the page.

This means that we have to pay attention to that person’s sentence structure, vocabulary, and rhythms of speech when writing the narration in the book.

First person remains a popular point of view in all styles of fiction, both commercial and literary.

Advantages and disadvantages of first person POV.

The main advantages are:

  1. First person is an intuitive voice for writers to produce and for readers to consume.
  2. It creates intimacy and immediacy. First person narration is the absolute closest in narrative distance that we, as readers, can get to a fictional character. We share the narrator’s thoughts, feelings, and views of the world. And, the events in the story are presented in real time—we are right there with the character in every scene.
  3. Closeness builds trust. If your story focuses on the trials and tribulations of a main protagonist, especially if that character undergoes immense internal change, the close narrative distance of first-person will heighten the impact of the story on the reader. In short, it helps connect the reader to the character. Other forms of POV can do this too, of course, but first person is excellent in this regard.

Some disadvantages:

  1. Limiting yourself to one character’s perspective can restrict your options as a storyteller. You won’t be able to enter the perspective of any other characters with first person. In some stories, there isn’t a need to. However, some forms of fiction, like thrillers, can benefit from switching between characters. Your choice of POV should factor that in.

Second person.

In this point of view, the narrator refers to the reader as “you”.

You take a shortcut down a dark alley, feel a gun against your spine. A voice says to you, “Take out your wallet.”

I won’t go into too much detail on this POV, because it is very rare for novelists to use it. My opinion is that second person can be more effective in short-form writing, but in long-form it is difficult to execute effectively.

As a reader, second person annoys me after awhile. I can’t help thinking, “No, narrator, you’re not talking about me…it’s the character.”

Third person.

This point of view means that the story is told from a narrative distance. There are several types of third person, so let’s break down each one.

Types of third person POV.

Third person is the most versatile point of view, especially in contemporary fiction. You can choose from the following:

Limited third person.

For limited third, the viewpoint character is “he” or “she,” and is directly involved in the events of the story. As with first person, we are limited to the perspective of that character and can’t divulge anything to the reader that our viewpoint character does not think, feel, or perceive.

This creates the same intimacy and immediacy that we get with first person point of view, resulting in a strong connection between the reader and the character.

However, limited third person comes with an advantage over first person…we can easily switch viewpoint characters with a scene or chapter break.

He took a shortcut down the dark alley, felt a gun against his spine. A voice said to him, “Take out your wallet.”

***

She pressed the .38 into his flesh, her finger over the trigger.

In this short example, we return to the same situation we’ve seen before. This time, we see the differences between the two viewpoint characters’ perspectives in the scene.

The man feels a gun (he doesn’t know what kind) against his back and hears a voice. We then have a scene break and enter his assailant’s viewpoint. She knows exactly what kind of gun it is (a .38 revolver) because it’s her weapon. She also feels her own finger over the trigger, so her viewpoint gives us that detail as well.

By using limited third, we’re able to seamlessly switch viewpoint characters to give the reader multiple angles of the situation, with high levels of immediacy. Now, we’re connected to both characters.

Limited third person or first person?

By contrast, having multiple first person narrators is awkward and clumsy.

I took a shortcut down a dark alley, felt a gun against my spine. A voice said to me, “Take out your wallet.”

***

I pressed the .38 into his flesh, my finger over the trigger.

Having two first person viewpoints here creates confusion for the reader, because we can’t distinguish between them. In third person, we can use different pronouns or give the characters’ names. But in first person, we must stick with “I”.

Limited third person delivers the intimacy of first person with the flexibility of a more distant narrative style, allowing us to shift viewpoints. For this reason, it is the most popular point of view in fiction today, especially commercial fiction.

Think about thriller novels, which often have large casts and will shift between the protagonist, the villain, and multiple supporting characters. All of those different perspectives make the storytelling more interesting and exciting for the reader. Third limited makes that possible.

Third person omniscient.

In this point of view, the narrator is the all-knowing author, who sees the story from a greater narrative distance and has access to the thoughts, feelings, and perception of every character.

We can switch between viewpoints easily with third omniscient. Additionally, we can give the reader information that only the storyteller would know. For instance:

John thought this would be the last time he’d see the bloody knife. Ten years later, he’d learn otherwise.

In the moment, John can’t possibly know what will happen ten years from the time he uses that knife to kill someone. But the all-knowing narrator does, and can include that little teaser for the reader without breaking the rules of third omniscient.

It is a very natural storytelling voice to read, since we’ve seen it over and over again since we were young. Children’s stories, folktales, and fables commonly use this POV.

Stephen King is the contemporary author I recommend studying to learn this technique—especially his novel, It. King himself is the narrator, and most of the book employs a close narrative distance to the characters. He even switches to first person and limited third in various sections.

However, he’ll also include some ominous lines that only the omniscient narrator could know. When the Losers’ Club are still children, for instance, he’ll tease the horrific events they’ll encounter as adults.

The resulting effect is a mood of impending doom and mystery that is perfect for horror fiction.

Advantages and disadvantages.

The advantages are many:

  1. This is the most flexible point of view, giving us the most liberty in our storytelling. We can follow any character at any time, discuss anyone’s thoughts, and even introduce events that are yet to occur.
  2. Once again, it is a very natural voice for the reader to hear. We’re all familiar with stories told by an all-knowing narrator, and it is easy to become immersed in this point of view when it is done correctly.
  3. Like third limited, we have the opportunity to deeply connect with multiple characters, because we can see inside their psyches. The difference is that third limited requires a scene or chapter break to signal a change in viewpoint, whereas third omniscient does not.

There are a couple of key disadvantages:

  1. It is the hardest point of view to use. This makes sense, because with greater freedom comes greater labor. Yes, we can follow any character at any time, discuss anyone’s thoughts, and even introduce events that are yet to occur. But that involves managing a tremendous amount of moving pieces.
  2. The narrative distance is greater than in both first person and limited third. While we can still close that distance by telling the reader the most intimate thoughts of the characters, third omniscient can’t accomplish the same level of immediacy as those other two POVs. This can be a benefit, depending on the desired effect you want to create.

Summary.

To review:

  1. The most common POVs in fiction today are: first person, limited third person, and third person omniscient.
  2. In first person, the viewpoint character is “I” and narrates the story from their perspective. It has the highest levels of immediacy and intimacy.
  3. In limited third, the viewpoint character is “he” or “she” and narrates the story from their perspective. It combines the immediacy of first person with a slightly greater narrative distance, making it easy to switch viewpoints with scene and chapter breaks.
  4. In omniscient third, the narrator is all-knowing, and can give the reader any information about the characters and events. It has the lowest immediacy but the highest level of flexibility for the writer.
  5. Second person is worth knowing, but is rarely used in long-form storytelling.

There are even more variations of these points of view, which we will cover in future posts.

  • My article on How to Write in Free Indirect Style

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Story Writing: The Ultimate Guide to Great Scenes

December 28, 2018 by Michael Santos

There is nothing more critical to the success of a story, especially a long-form story like a novel, than the writer’s ability to create compelling scenes.

In this article, we’ll discuss scene structure, execution, and how to tell if you’ve written an effective scene or a dud.

Scenes either work or they don’t.

The truth is that the mechanics of scenes are specific and essential. If the writer ignores these mechanics or fails to learn them, their stories will fail to work at their most basic level.

This is because long-form stories are built on collections of scenes. Sometimes each chapter is a single scene, while other authors group multiple scenes together in one chapter.

Either way, the reader’s satisfaction with the story depends on how well these scenes advance the external and internal narratives.

For a scene to work, it needs the following…

Scene structure mirrors story structure.

Scene Structure

Remember the essential components of plot structure from my article on that topic? Here’s a brief refresher, but I recommend reading that post before continuing with this one.

The story opens with the inciting incident, which changes the status quo to the extent that the protagonist must take action. Complications arise in the middle build, giving us twists and turns and driving the story forward with continuous change and progressively rising stakes.

The crisis occurs when the stakes are so high that the protagonist faces a choice between two bad options. When they act on their decision, we have the climax, in which we see how their choice plays out. Finally, the resolution concludes the narrative and shows us how the character and/or circumstances have evolved.

Scenes are just mini-stories.

Every scene follows the same structure that your story does.

Each one should open with an action or a coincidence (as you’ll recall from the section on inciting incidents in the plot structure post). That incident should prompt the character(s) to do something, which will begin the events of the scene.

Complications in the middle should act as small turning points that gradually raise the stakes and the pressure on the characters.

The pressure builds until a character (your protagonist or point of view character) must make a choice at the end of the scene. This is the crisis.

We then see the climax, as they take action based on their choice.

For the vast majority of scenes, you’ll want the resolution to end on a cliffhanger that motivates the reader to continue to the next scene. This is most commonly associated with commercial page-turners, but it applies to all genres and styles of fiction.

Scenes must follow this structure in order to work. Without an inciting incident, middle complications, a crisis, a climax, and a resolution, your scenes won’t resonate with readers.

A question of polarity.

Scenes must also turn. That is, there must be a shift in your protagonist’s quest to get what they consciously want (the external narrative) or what they subconsciously need (the internal narrative).

This is also called a shift in polarity. If the overall state of your character’s journey is positive at the beginning of a scene, the polarity must shift to a negative or a double positive. If it is negative, it means the scene introduces a new setback that prevents the character from achieving their goals. A double positive does the opposite.

Likewise, if the scene opens on a negative polarity, it must shift to a positive or to a double negative. The state of the conflict must improve or get even worse.

If a scene does not include a change in polarity—a turn—it is not a scene. There is no advancement of the story in a passage that does not turn, making it ineffective.

To write an engaging scene, the external and/or internal narratives must progress in some way, either positively or negatively, from where they were at the beginning of the scene.

For more information on external and internal narratives, read my article on them.

Editing your scenes.

When I edit a manuscript (and before I send a manuscript to my editor) I spend most of my time analyzing every scene in the novel.

I ensure that they follow the structure that will make them engaging for the reader. I check that there is a polarity shift by writing a sign (+, -, ++, or –) at the beginning of the scene and a different sign at the end. Finally, I evaluate how the external and internal narratives develop in each one.

Once in awhile, I’ll come across a passage I’ve written that I can’t seem to fix. It won’t turn, I can’t find a polarity shift that leaves an impact on the story, and the scene is ultimately boring.

What do you do when that happens?

You cut the scene.

You wouldn’t build a castle out of stones that have massive cracks in them. The place would come crumbling down. Scenes are the building blocks of stories. They must be solid as well.

Summary.

Okay, let’s review:

  1. The success of a story depends on the writer’s ability to write great scenes.
  2. Scenes either work or they don’t, with little wiggle room. Writers MUST understand the mechanics of scenes.
  3. Scenes are mini-stories that follow the same structure as the overall plot.
  4. Scenes must turn, meaning that there must be a polarity shift from positive to negative, positive to double positive, negative to positive, or negative to double negative.
  5. When editing, cut any scene that you can’t fix. It likely isn’t important to the story if you can’t make it turn.

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Story Writing: The Five Essentials of Plot Structure

December 27, 2018 by Michael Santos

In this article, we begin a look at story structure by exploring the five essential building blocks of any plot. Every story, no matter its genre, must have these five components.

Writing that is missing even one of these simply does not work as a story and won’t resonate with readers.

The Inciting Incident

This scene begins the story and hooks the reader. Without a compelling inciting incident, there is no motivation for anyone to continue beyond the opening of your story. If this scene is lackluster, they’ll just put the book down.

The inciting incident changes the protagonist’s life. It upsets the status quo and presents them with a situation, challenge, or problem so great that they must take action to face it. That action is the launching point for the rest of the story.

Action or Coincidence?

The scene may be the result of an active choice by the character, such as a cop who chooses to quit the force to become a PI and must begin a new career.

The other option is to have the inciting incident be a coincidence or random happening that impacts the character, such as a homicide detective who gets called to the scene of a new murder.

No matter what you write, the inciting incident must prompt your character to take action.

The promise of genre.

Inherent in your choice will be the promise that your genre makes to the reader. For instance, when a homicide detective is called out to a crime scene, the reader understands that the story ahead is a murder mystery.

The opening promises them the experience that will follow, and so the beginning must correspond to the experience that the middle and end of the book deliver.

The ending has to pay off the inciting incident in a surprising way. It must tie back to the event that began the story.

In a murder mystery that opens with the arrival of a new case on the detective’s desk, the middle of the story will contain the progression of that case, and the ending must resolve it for the story to be satisfying.

In that way, inciting incidents define the whole concept for your story.

For example, when I defined the concept for my second novel, Mr. Moneybags, I boiled the premise down to this short pitch, which also describes what happens in the book’s inciting incident scene:

A retired armed-robber gets back into the game when his old partner shares her idea to kidnap the boss of a car-theft ring and steal millions from him.

Complications

The middle build portion of the story (the middle 50% of the content) must be full of complications that fuel the story’s external and internal conflicts.

These complications create the twists and turns that keep the story moving forward. They ensure that the reader never gets bored or loses interest.

To do this, you must present your characters (especially your protagonist) with problems of increasing size and importance. The stakes must always be raised, as your characters pursue their conscious wants in the external conflicts and learn the lessons that their subconscious needs to learn in the internal conflicts.

Don’t miss my article on writing compelling external and internal conflicts!

These complications should build in scale until we reach the story’s climax, when the characters face a problem that pushes them to the limits of their humanity.

In most mysteries and thrillers, this will be the life and death conflict when the protagonist and villain finally confront one another.

The Crisis

At this point in the story, the complications have raised the stakes to the point that the character now faces a difficult choice between two bad options. This creates a crisis situation.

Their decision one way or the other will tell the reader a lot about them, making this kind of scene an excellent opportunity to showcase the character’s development.

The two options must both threaten the character with negative consequences. There can be no obvious victory in sight.

An example.

I’ll use my first novel, No Hard Feelings, as an example. My protagonist, a hit man called The Apostle, is on the run from the police and from a pair of criminals who want to kill him after he crossed them. One of those criminals catches him and makes a deal…if The Apostle will murder a detective who is causing trouble for the crooks, his previous sins will be forgiven.

If The Apostle says no, he’ll be shot on the spot. If he says yes, however, he’ll have to go through with the hit, meaning that the entire police force will be out for vengeance. He might be able to run, but his life will likely be over anyway.

Which is the better of the two bad choices? His decision tells the reader who he is, what he values, and demonstrates how he has developed to that point.

What does he choose? Nice try, but you’ll have to read the book to find out!

Remember, the best of two bad choices.

The key to writing a compelling crisis is to make it a truly difficult decision. Neither option can be good. The character must be trapped.

The choice will change their life in such a way that there will never be a way for them to undo the consequences of their actions.

The Climax

Let’s get back to the climax of the story. It follows the largest crisis your character faces.

The climactic scene is the one in which your character acts on the choice they make in the crisis.

After an inciting incident that hooks the reader, complications in the middle build that keep the reader engaged, and a harrowing choice between two bad options in the crisis, the climax is the emotional peak of the story.

It must also pay off your characters’ arcs. If your characters change throughout the story (as they should, if you have internal conflicts in place), then the decision they would have made at the beginning of the story should be different from the decision they do make at the end.

This difference in choice shows the reader how much the characters have developed during their arcs. This is especially crucial for your protagonist. Many contemporary thrillers have multiple prominent characters, however, so you may need to consider the arcs of multiple people.

Climaxes in crime fiction.

In a mystery, the writer must also deliver the answer to the puzzle, keeping in mind that the reader should have all of the clues that they need to solve it BEFORE this scene.

In a thriller, the sensations of dread and impending doom must be at their highest levels in this scene, in order to maximize the suspense.

For more information on writing mysteries and thrillers, read my posts on those subjects.

Resolution

This last component of the story allows the reader to understand the effects of the climax on the external and internal narratives.

There are two crucial factors to consider in your resolution…

  1. Don’t make it corny or cliche. Your first idea for the resolution has been done before…trust me. So spend time thinking about how to conclude your story, because the first thing that pops into your head won’t be original enough.
  2. Don’t review content the reader has already seen. For instance, don’t make the resolution a conversation rehashing the events of the climax. The reader will lose interest, and the ending won’t be satisfying.

Resolutions in commercial and literary fiction.

Here’s a trick to help you. If you’re a commercial fiction author writing in a popular genre, chances are your climax will focus on the external narrative. In a murder mystery, it will be the epic conclusion of the investigation, as the detective confronts the perpetrator in a life and death struggle.

If you are a literary fiction writer, the climax will likely focus on the internal narrative, in which the character will undergo their most dramatic change after their entire internal identity, worldview, and/or sense of morality have been called into question.

In either case, your resolution should center around the narrative that the climax did NOT handle.

The commercial novel’s resolution should explore the character’s internal change in the aftermath of the story. The literary novel’s resolution should show the reader how the external circumstances have changed as a result of the character’s development.

By handling it this way, you avoid reviewing story content that you’ve already delivered. Instead, you fulfill the cathartic reading experience by completing both narratives with satisfying pay offs.

In my crime novels, the climaxes resolve the major external conflicts between the characters. There are often outbreaks of gun play, quick-witted verbal slings and arrows, and the question of who will walk away with the money (and their lives).

My resolutions, then, resolve the internal narratives. Do the characters get what they subconsciously needed all along?

The power of ironic resolutions.

One way to make your endings memorable is to make them ironic. That is, the characters may see a positive outcome in the external narrative but not in the internal, or vice versa.

For instance, what if the detective has to do something that brings their sense of morality into question in order to catch the killer? So, in the end, the external conflict resolves in their favor (they get what they consciously want), but now they must deal with the aftermath of their choice to sacrifice their values.

They can’t undo the consequences of their choice (a crisis of conscience), so they must live with those consequences long after the killer is behind bars.

External victory, internal turmoil–this contradiction makes ironic endings interesting. These are the resolutions that are most likely to stick with a reader after they finish the book.

Summary

  1. The five essentials of plot structure are the inciting incident, middle complications, crisis, climax, and resolution.
  2. The inciting incident must change the protagonist’s status quo, prompt the character to take action, and hook the reader. It can also be used to define the concept of your story.
  3. Middle complications are the twists and turns that keep the reader engaged and that raise the stakes for the characters. They cause the external plot to move forward and the internal arcs to develop.
  4. The crisis presents the protagonist with a choice between two bad options. There is no easy way out, no happy ending in sight.
  5. The climax occurs when the character acts on their choice, when the stakes are at their highest.
  6. Finally, the resolution lets the reader digest the story. If the climax focused on the external narrative, the resolution will conclude the internal narrative, and vice versa. Ironic resolutions are the most memorable.

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Looking for a new thriller?

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Mr. Moneybags

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